Favorite Reviews (54)

1 Name: THEKyuubi27 : 2010-11-04 22:38 ID:qBnr45jS

What's the best review you have ever received?

2 Name: Chris000 : 2010-11-05 12:04 ID:GJwadCgM

It was the first one I ever recieved when I started doing my crossovers. I was around 12 and the people there told me my story didn't suck. It was monumental because it told me that I truly could be a writer!

3 Name: THEKyuubi27 : 2010-11-05 14:10 ID:qBnr45jS

Awesome! I started when I was 16....My first story is somehow my most successful...Any reason why? I mean, they were just some random ideas......

4 Name: THEKyuubi27 : 2010-11-05 14:11 ID:qBnr45jS

Awesome! I started when I was 16....My first story is somehow my most successful...Any reason why? I mean, they were just some random ideas......

5 Name: tearthepetals : 2010-11-05 15:21 ID:Yjh0qTuW

Writing an 'issue' story and being told in a review that I made someone reconsider their behaviours, and think about looking for help. Also, whenever I'm told something is particularly realistic it makes me happy.

6 Name: Yemi Hikari : 2010-11-05 15:32 ID:xBlZZO0R

>>2 - I remember seeing you before. I remember glancing at the profile and thinking... those things, most unlikely thing to be able to crossover, but from the looks of it and the sounds of what people are saying, you actually did a good job. Can't comment, as I am not that familiar with the fandoms. Tyrpically, random crossovers like that, don't end up having that much storyline.

>>3 - I think it depends. When I first started, so was my new story. But then, I happened to have posted my story into the LotR fandom just at the right time. I need to go back and rewrite it so it is better written then it is.

>>5 - That is just awsume. My issue stories seem to be mostly preaching to the choir.

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What is my best review... gosh... that one is hard. I had a few awsume crit. reviews. I've also had a few that were really poignant in what they said... thought obviously went into them. So, for me, it is hard to pick.

7 Name: Chris000 : 2010-11-05 17:12 ID:E/WtgfiW

>>6

To you too, it seems like you've been doing this for quite some time! Thanks for the recognition pal! Hopefully you'll get to your 200th story soon!

8 Name: Gin : 2010-11-05 17:38 ID:x9CAZZwG

One of my stories, my most popular oneshot (in terms of favourites) has five reviews. Three of them I particularly treasure. Two of them are medium-long reviews, the third almost a thesis -- but all three show that the readers saw beyond the words and into the "heart" of the story.

From a completely different perspective, I was stunned when I got a review from one of the best-known (and best) writers of part of the YGO fandoms.

9 Name: Niori : 2010-11-05 19:39 ID:QZzCAlNY

A review on a BTVS oneshot. The very kind lady told me she loved it so much that she created a profile just so she could add it to her favs.
Now that made my day.

10 Name: Amber : 2010-11-12 08:09 ID:FDxPko+n

I loved when I wasn't updating fast enough and someone threatened to hunt me down and kill me. I'm not being sarcastic either, when someone is willing to threaten murder to get the next chapter of your story...you feel special. And scared...but mostly special. xD

11 Name: THEKyuubi27 : 2010-11-12 14:54 ID:iiHu+ZHz

>>10 Awesome......I wish i was threatened like that....:(

12 Name: セーラーエリスは刀の女ですか。 : 2010-11-12 16:00 ID:aDNp98mG

This one for my story "without you":
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Aya wrote:
It was as impressive as the other one! (Btw, I really love the expression, "as red as a tomato" freaking CUTE! May I use it in daily life?LOL). When I was watching it, I was a small baby so Haruka was just one of Sailor Moon characters for me. Then I hadn't watched it for long time. But you reminded me of Haruka again. The story exactly demonstrates how I felt towards her now- She could be a great, sexy otokoyaku nya♥ Her hair, her mysterious eye look, good height, cool feature- everything! She has everything to be a male role star!! as for the cheating part, I could easily imagine the scene & grinned alone LOL Are you still continue writing it? とても楽しかったです。そしてあなたの日本語はとても上手だと思うよ☆
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This review gave me really much strength and will power to keep on writing. Especially the part about the character, because hearing that from a Japanese counts a lot more, because who is better to understand a Japanese character than someone who is Japanese!

13 Name: Anonymous : 2010-11-12 16:37 ID:2UD5OqXD

>>12 Are you sure the reviewer was Japanese? Just because she replied with some Japanese in her review doesn't mean she's Japanese. Just saying...

14 Name: Mitsuki : 2010-11-12 19:05 ID:pOXeTI8o

The best review I ever got said that after reading the story she wanted it to become canon since it was so close to the actual story. I felt really happy, since I placed my whole heart in it!

15 Name: Gothic-Neko-Writer : 2010-11-12 22:02 ID:yWqbMMcs

Ooo that's tough cause my most famous story, Ice Princess has 41 reviews and 1 of them is a flame =( and the 40 others are ones tht I love but my favorite one was "natsumes a vampir yet he's running from you! You must be wicked strong! Lol" my second fav was "i dont want to get blakemaild or die so here i am" That one made my day C= and my third fav was "WHAT THE HECK? ! lOL .

Epic." XDDD

16 Name: セーラーエリスは刀の女ですか。 : 2010-11-13 01:55 ID:jM6K+NLY

>>13 Yes She is Japanese because I know her, I gave her my story to read it and she sent a PM with that review

17 Name: Sky : 2010-11-13 10:30 ID:yATB0wkB

My favorite review (more like reviews) I ever got had to be when I couldn't update fast enough. And this one dude kept reviewing all the chapters over and over and OVER! Some he said he was crying, laughing, stalking me, going to hunt me down if I didn't update...I love thoes random dudes.

18 Name: Bob Rhynoplasty : 2010-11-20 13:45 ID:ES9WO/Hz

I've gotten a lot of great reviews for my stories, and a lot of bad ones, lol. But I'd have to say one of my all time favorites is "unlike just about every Tibbs story if I learned something like this happened I wouldn't be the least bit surprised... Really good job you really have a feel for the two and their connection." That made me smile. I also loved it when one reviewer told me that if I ever wrote a TIVA story, it would be the first sign of the end of the world, that made me burst out laughing.

19 Name: Bitch Goddess : 2010-11-20 14:27 ID:EqZrBNoX

It wasn't a review per se, but a girl who had been reading my Covenant story from the beginning sent me an e-mail when I hadn't updated in a couple months. She was just asking if I was going to update soon, and telling me that she loved the story and all that, but I was really flattered that she would go so far as to send me an e-mail rather than just something on FFN.

20 Name: Chris000 : 2010-11-20 21:00 ID:tItF1yTu

>>17 Normally those ones concern me rather than inspire me...

21 Name: Yemi Hikari : 2010-11-20 21:31 ID:xBlZZO0R

>>17 - I kind of agree with >>20 ... those kind of reviews would bother me.

22 Name: THEKyuubi27 : 2010-11-21 21:12 ID:SXvDZgBN

This is my newest favorite review:

Honestly the only thing that I can think of to describe this story is badass and even still I think that is an understatment. I honestly am looking forward to the preliminary round due to the chance of a leaf casualty. I do have a question though and it's will you be introducing any Kiri OCs due to the amount of power that Naruto and the rest of the Yonnin? Either way good luck and happy holidays!

>>17 That's freaking awesome! Random is so funny..

>>21 I mean, they can't really hurt anyone, I think they just get out of hand, and say insane things like that

23 Name: Yemi Hikari : 2010-11-23 00:29 ID:xBlZZO0R

>>22 - I wouldn't want my story spammed though, which is what I got out of what >>17 said. Then again, I did in fact have a story spammed before, back when a major Spammer hit the Redwall fandom. I don't know if anyone remembers a note on the home page, but they installed new spam measures in the reviews after that, cut down on the number of anon between non-anon reviews someone can get.

24 Name: THEKyuubi27 : 2010-11-25 06:23 ID:66pSkM+C

I sometimes get a rude spammish comment, but i just report it. Like some dude always went to my stories to bash it, when everyone else liked it. Like everyone could say it's awesome, and one douchebag gets on it and tears my confidence to shreds.

25 Name: Yemi Hikari : 2010-11-25 11:13 ID:xBlZZO0R

>>24 - The stuff that hit the Redwall fandom wasn't reportable, it was all anon. But we couldn't easily delete it because when we went to remove the reviews, our computer got major backlag from the number of anon reviews.

26 Name: THEKyuubi27 : 2010-11-25 16:36 ID:CL2Hxp3Z

That sucks.......BAD.......

27 Name: Gin : 2010-11-25 17:28 ID:x9CAZZwG

I think I've just (w/i last three hours) received one that seals it, really, as perhaps the best review I've ever received:

"I'll be first to admit normally I wouldn't review this type of fic. Normally I only review duel-based fics, but given my own feelings towards Aporia's backstory... yeah, I had to."

It's only the first line, but it's enough to give an idea of the rest of the review. Honestly, to be able to engage people whose taste in stories usually lies outside the style I use... In my eyes, that's a greater achievement than any reviews from a "fanbase".

28 Name: Yemi Hikari : 2010-11-25 22:49 ID:xBlZZO0R

>>27 - I actually like leaving those kinds of reviews, even recieving them. Though sometimes I slam my head on badfic when I see those type of reviews.

29 Name: Yemi Hikari : 2010-11-25 22:50 ID:xBlZZO0R

>>27 - I actually like leaving those kinds of reviews, even recieving them. Though sometimes I slam my head on badfic when I see those type of reviews.

30 Name: Mungetsu : 2010-11-28 17:39 ID:GNQqLbum

"dang!ken vs retsu!i hope that kenpachi doesnt die,hes among my fave characters in bleach"

It's my favorite because until now that guy's been posting just a "good chapter" for every review. XD

31 Name: THEKyuubi27 : 2010-11-29 20:04 ID:3sUM9iHx

Which episode does Kenny fight Retsu??

32 Name: Mungetsu : 2010-11-30 19:12 ID:GNQqLbum

None. The guy was reviewing a fanfic. :D

33 Name: Mungetsu : 2010-11-30 19:14 ID:GNQqLbum

@31 - None. The guy was reviewing a fanfic. :D

34 Name: KazeYami : 2010-12-01 07:28 ID:02OjjGHq

Gasp! I got the best one ever!
There's this author that I really like. I follow him and read all his stuff.
And, one day, I wrote a fic for the fandom he usually writes for and he wrote this long awesome comment. Now, he commented that I needed a beta reader to catch my mistakes and stuff, but I definitely like it when people give me some constructive criticism. That means that they really liked my story enough and paid attention closely enough that the grammar and stuff actually bothered them enough that they would suggest I fix it up. Anyway, the fact that it was someone who's stories I read had read my story really made my day. Best review evuh! X3

35 Name: KatonRyu : 2010-12-04 14:51 ID:Rv7ySNkY

I just got a wonderful review on my latest fic. I'm so pleased with this one that I'll post it here:

“On top of the hill, gazing over the valley, were two young dinosaurs, a
longneck and a three-horn.”

A bit of inconsistency there. Longneck and threehorn are the same kind of
description, so either use a hyphen for both or don’t use a hyphen for any
of them.

“Her horns were starting to grow and her body color was getting darker,”

There is a comma rule that states that when an independent clause is on both
sides of a conjunction, there needs to be a comma before the conjunction. Both
“Her horns were starting to grow” and “her body was getting darker”
can stand alone, so there needs to be a comma at “grow.”

“Every few seconds or so a streak of white appeared in the sky;”

There is another comma rule that states that when a dependent clause is
followed by an independent clause, a comma needs to separate the two clauses.
“Every few seconds or so” is dependent. “a streak of white appeared in
the sky” is independent. Therefore, a comma needs to fall after “so.”

Both of those comma rules and more can be found on this website. Amusingly
enough, the first comma rule I mentioned here is the first one on the page,
and the second rule I mentioned here is the second one on the page (2b).
http:/owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/607/02/

“Soon enough, he saw the silhouette of a three-horn, lying on its side
amidst shattered rocks and a charred tree.”

Threehorns are either male or female. Since you were referring to Cera, use
“her,” not “its.”

I saw a few other things, but I feel that those are the main things to
address. As for the story itself, it was beautifully written. You feel that
you lacked detail, but you painted a very vivid picture with this story. I
could see everything that was going on with your wording. The story was very
moving, nearly bringing me to tears. The characters were portrayed very
accurately and everything they said and did was quite believable. I enjoyed
reading this story very much; you have a lot of talent with writing. This was
a well-composed tragic romance, and I hope to see more of your work in the
future.

This review is one of the few I got so far actually giving me tips on how to improve, and this person actually seems to know what he/she is talking about.

Since this reviewer seems knowledgeable, I consider the praise at the end of the review valid. Reviews like these really make my day.

36 Name: Kath : 2011-02-01 22:01 ID:QmLi6Eqi

Their is so many reviews I love, I don't think I could really chose. But all of them make me feel warm and fuzzy inside xD

37 Name: セーラーエリスは刀の女ですか。 : 2011-02-02 11:43 ID:sKDpKoqs

okay here one of the latest I got in a kind of old (short of) one shot

>WHOA horsie! Michiru Kaioh, you get back on that bus now! ^ Wow. Nice 1st person narration for both of them, you had me laughing like crazy... ^^

LOL it made me laugh a lot

38 Name: Nyt Yanse : 2011-02-11 04:19 ID:ivuE6cqR

I agree with @36, every good review is a GREAT review. But if I had to pick one, I'd probably have to say the second review I ever got, from Laudine, on my first fanfic. Not only positive, but incredibly constructive- some fabulous advice that I still use. Another of my favourite reviewers is shadowsamurai83- a repeat reviewer and so very funny when she wants to be.

39 Name: AkitaFallow : 2011-03-13 21:45 ID:mj9CPT/e

I got a review from one of my favourite fanfic authors, saying they really liked my story. I basically totally freaked out and then read it about a dozen times.

Another of my favourites was when a reader wrote a near-novel-length review that actually critiqued what I was writing, and let me know exactly what they enjoyed. I loved hearing that my characters were actually IC and my plot was believable. Much better than just the "Great chapter, update!" reviews.

40 Name: Meru-chan : 2011-03-26 19:10 ID:m3mIqWYl

Surprisingly, the best review I've ever gotten was one that did not even compliment or praise my story at all. In fact, this review was criticizing many aspects of my story, calling my OC a Mary-Sue and informing me of my plot-rushing style.

At first, I was incredibly offended, but as I read it again I realized how helpful the reviewer was being. Rereading my story, I found many things I would never have noticed on my own. (I'm kind of ashamed of my story now to be honest.) But I found it really helpful, not just towards this specific story, but for any future stories as well; a real eye-opener.

41 Name: loneguppy : 2011-04-17 12:44 ID:VPxxkr1l

It's not everyday I get lengthy reviews. And this one moved me because the message was as meaningful as the story I wrote. This is for Fear Not Death.

Beautifully written, conveyed powerfully through every character - even the ones briefly featured. I believe that Alt-Livia will (in some form or another) redeem herself and that "Our Side" characters will forgive her. As you said, things aren't just black and white, right and wrong etc. there are always shades of grey and of course different preceptions and beliefs. I can say that I don't wish Alt-Livia dead (even after "the" scene in 3x04) as I still firmly believe that she has good in her, she has to, just like our Olivia does and yet is not perfect. These imperfections are what make believable and intriguing haracters, after all. Wow, sorry for all the rambling - bottom line, you've a gem of a fic here. It is unique and powerful in such few words and that is quite an accomplishment. Well done :)

42 Name: FluffyBunnies : 2011-04-17 19:27 ID:kHhs6cqG

There was this one person who not only reviewed, but even sent me a PM afterwards. She was all, "OMG. THAT WAS THE BEST STORY I'VE READ WITH THAT CHARACTER AND AN OC. NO JOKES." And continued on how she wanted me to write an actual story, because she liked it so much. I was sooo happy.

I feel kinda bad though...not only her, but others wanted me to change it from a one-shot to an actual story...but I never got around to that. >___>

But, that was my best review (and the PM). It felt good to have someone say such nice things about my writing. :)

43 Name: moonphase : 2011-04-25 05:48 ID:cjXIxz3K

I have some awesome reviewers, I'm very lucky.

These are my favourite reviews from my fic A Death Note Carol:
BlueCaterpillarAbsolem
2011-02-11 . chapter 39
Good evening.

Actually... I don't really know what to write. When I came across this story yesterday afternoon I was literally blown away by its perfection. To be honest: I've never read a Death Note fanfiction as well written and carefully thought through as this before.

When I had to stop reading around 3 am - due to lack of sleep the night before - I almost felt like crying.

You managed to let Light Yagami have an almost radical change of mind staying perfectly in character all the while. Quite a rare thing to happen.

It has been a while since I last watched the series or took a look at the manga, but I fully remember me never beeing able to sympathize with Light and mentally cheering when Near called him a mass murderer in the end.

That might be part of the reason why I simply adore the way you portrayed him.

The ghost of the future sure was scary. Even more so the future itself. You certainly are a second Stephen King. When 'Jude' and Sayu died, I suddenly burst out in tears. I cannot help believing that Kira had finally been beaten in this very moment.

Writing this very touching and insightful story must have been a hell of a lot of work. You even did a lot of reserch on hictoric events (which probably have inspired Ohba and Obata to write/draw "Death Note" in the first place) and let Light become the cruel and opressive dictator he certainly would have been if everything would have went his way.

A death note is an extraordinarily dangerous weapon. Due to the fact that its wielder does not have to look at his victims when killing them, which would have been the case - as you yourself pointed out earlier - if Light would have found a gun instead. He never had to face the true extent of the horrible consequences of his actions until those three ghosts appeared.

Unnecessary to mention that I was absolutely stunned by Ls past.

This story clearly deserves better than just one short review, I have to apologize.

Allow me to make just one request: I would like to translate „A Death Note Carol“ into German and publish it on FanFiktion.de. Quite a few people there might already have read it, though.

I hope you can find it in your heart to grant this humble request. ^^

Just in case – this would be my account:

http:/www.fanfiktion.de/u/Jago

Good job, keep up the good work!

-Caterpillar

44 Name: moonphase : 2011-04-25 05:50 ID:cjXIxz3K

Cont'd

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Nik
2011-04-23 . chapter 39
I can't tell you how many times I've read this story and cried like a baby over it...

I've read your profile update and I just want to say how GLAD that you're not leaving this open or abruptly ended- well, from what it sounds like, anyway :D.

This story is really one of the best fanfictions I've ever read on this site... and that's saying something...

I love you you make the situations utterly believable, in the sense that should this Scrooge-horror actually happen to Light, I doubt it would differ much from your story...

All the chapters are extremely well written and heartbreaking and the fairytale "breaks" you put in only add to the overall 'enchanting' quality of your fanfic. Do you believe it, I might have actually learned something...!

I honestly cannot describe how much I admire you as a person, to be able to see all of that in a simple manga. It really is...amazing.

FAVE CHAPTERS (THE ONES THAT MADE ME LAUGH AND CRY THE MOST):

  • Sucker Love
  • Light's True Face
  • In the Present
  • Paper World
  • Illusion (parts 1 & 2)

All I ask of you is to PLEASE make the ending as satisfying and awesome as the rest of the story... but I have complete faith in you and your writing ability, so I'm not too worried. ;D

Update soon!

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faithful readers!
Sashocirrione
2010-12-29 . chapter 39
I saw this had been updated, but I put off reading this chapter both because I've been extremely busy with writing my own fics in every spare moment I have the energy, and because I've been very sick the last week.

But here it goes, I'll be writing this review as I read (like I often do) to try not to forget anything.

The beginning of this chapter, with Light still reeling from his sister's death, and realizing that his chances of saving L are low, is quite heart-rending and poignant. For some reason, Light is the only fictional serial killer that I regularly felt sorry for, even in canon. Even though he's insane, egotistical, hypocritical, cold and manipulative, there's something about him that makes me want to root for him from time to time.

Right towards the beginning I found a typo:

"Different members of the Task Force showed up. Uzawa was playing with his child under a Christmas tree."

I think you mashed together "Aizawa" and "Ukita" or something like that.

This sentence I found really insightful:

"They were still stupid, still so naive! L had figured out so early on that he was Kira yet these men still did not believe L. They believed Light because they liked him, he looked good, was polite and had a father they respected."

That's exactly how canon is! L is disbelieved because he's a freak with no social graces, Light is believed because he's charming and is the image of respectability.

L's death scene was very intense, I think you wrote it well. It is hard to see what Light will do when he returns to the real world, but even if he doesn't interfere with events and simply watches L's death and then gives up being Kira afterwards, I think it would probably tear him apart mentally, make him obviously insane.

If Light realizes that much, then even his own selfishness would prompt him to save L. He could probably delay L's death by a tactic such as hinting to Rem that there are other L's out there with the same data that L has, but getting out of all the trouble he and Misa are in might be complicated and require fast action and a bit of luck.

45 Name: moonphase : 2011-04-25 05:52 ID:cjXIxz3K

Jesus, ok there's a lot more than I thought. Lol, I like most of my reviews.
This is my fave from Turn of the page (this first one pushed me to start looking for a beta)
Hmm. . . I don't know where to start. . . But I'll guess I'll start off by saying how awesome the plot for this fanfic is, and how awesomely well-described everything is. It's so interesting and magnificent, yet I can't get a clear image of some things because it's just so beyond words. You truly have a talent for description.

I hope not to discourage you with what I'm about to say next, but some of your grammar and spelling is really off. As FFdotNet suggests, you should really spellcheck your work and if you do not have one, search online for one. I know two very helpful ones, so I'll tell you this: google search 'spellcheckplus' and click the first result. There's a character limit, but it's really helpful. Also search 'online grammar checker' and (skipping the ads, if there are any) go to the fourth result. It has no character limit, but opens into a new window. It even has a thesaurus, which you probably don't because you've those describing skills I keep boasting on about, but I just thought I'd add.

I may be nowhere near chapter 12 and you might not even take this into consideration (to just fix the past chapters), but I hope this helps in the future!

  • Michi-chan.

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sinfulseraph
2011-04-19 . chapter 12
This story is pure gold. I can't believe my luck to stumble upon it. The plot is very well thought out, well written and the supernatural aspects are perfectly chilling. I like how the reader slowly uncovers the secrets as Matsuda does. Also, everyone is very in character and you've handled the possession parts really well. I can't wait to see what happens next. This is the best story I've read in a long time and probably the very best death note one (and I've read a lot of them lol). Thanks so much for posting.
Bittersweet Freedom
2011-04-19 . chapter 12
You know, I'm really sorry I haven't reviewed this story before. The whole concept is quite intriguing and I've only just realized the whole connection between Hycathins (sp?) and Lawliet and Light. L's the prince and Light... I wasn't really sure because both Zephyrus and Apollo fit his nature. I believe maybe Apollo is Light and the other god us his evil alter-ego, Kira. And I've noticed you've also added a pairing (or maybe it was always there and I've just noticed) MxL, which I might add is very vague. My instincts and heart tell me it's Matsuada and L -because that is like one of my favorite pairings ever. However, I've read back a few chapters and seen some hints toward Mello and Light, though I don't think that would make much sense with Mello seme? But yeah, update soon! :)
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I love pretty much all four reviews from Ghost in the machine-
Lupa Dracolis
2010-05-07 . chapter 1
Aah, so sad! This is really well written. Gave me chills!
Eating Water
2010-04-08 . chapter 1
Beautiful.

Your writing style is really visual and the descriptions you used added to the endless, empty atmosphere so darn well. And while Near supposedly had no soul, the way you explained and described it felt really soulful.

The thoughts and questions put into this are really contemplative and mean a lot.

You portrayed Near really well and really dug into his character.

Loved it ~~
Sashocirrione
2010-04-04 . chapter 1
Usually I don't like fics that are largely plotless character studies instead of stories, but this is really quite well-written. It feels like you've captured Near's personality and hidden motivations quite well.

It's sad and poignant that the only way Near can connect is through hatred, and that his life is based on nothingness.

It's particularly poignant that Near is more impaired socially than even L, who is quite an anti-social recluse himself.
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46 Name: moonphase : 2011-04-25 05:53 ID:cjXIxz3K

One more for death note fandom...
AxJfan
2010-12-25 . chapter 39
Wow, just wow.

I can honestly say you are the most incredible author I've read for the Death Note section. You don't spare any traits of humanity in Kira, nor do you write off Light's vanity as a trifle. You also don't get lost in description and shove facts down the reader's throat. If not minimalistic, your writing style is engaging.

You have a complete understanding of Light's character, and you know exactly how to play it. Using his vanity against him was marvelous: Light's image of himself is the most important thing in his world, his assumption that he is God and Good is what allows him to use the Death Note as he did.

So having him see himself as he really was, as ugly, putrid, and cruel, is one of the very few believable ways to go about granting Light redemption. You do not over-exaggerate, nor glorify any of the events happening, and your trials are beautiful.

Using Sayu against Light was well done, as she is a minor character in the series but truly one of the few who honestly love him and can relate to him. You recognized the weight of perfection his family put them under and how it affected him.

This is a wonderful story, and much more satisfying than the actual series, although completely believable. Light's character is perfectly cannon, along with Matsuda and the rest of the task force. I can't stress that enough: you understand them, their motives, what drives their characters and thus how they will act.

The actually writing is fitting for recounting memories and future events, and all I can criticize grammatically is you forget to capitalize Light's name and Kira's occasionally. If you want a little more feeling, try 'showing' instead of 'telling': don't say "Light felt blank" describe his body language, his surroundings, or rather, the lack of what he's feeling.

You've impressed me, and I sincerely look forward to your conclusion with this tale, as Light has already began to go through his own redemption. You've excited me and enticed me with this story in a way that I haven't felt for a long time, and I completely admire this work and hope to achieve something similar if I ever stay into writing the Death Note saga.

For story telling isn't about the writing, but about the depth and morals a character has to offer us, and yours is the cold, painful truth of redemption.

Well done,

AxJfan
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samalane
2010-10-03 . chapter 37
I am simply amazed at the intricacy of this story! At first it almost seems a little superficial, a sort of bastardized version of A Christmas Carol, but almost immediately you realize that the story is much deeper and darker than what the title proposes! I think your take on Light is perfect; the clash between his two personalities, his split ideals and opinions is so real and painful! His epiphanies and realizations are totally in character- he is realizing just how wrong and flawed not only his plans, but he himself are while still remaining in character. I absolutely love it.

I only wish I had read it earlier- I have a bad tendency to look up deep, complicated romances and often neglect the works that focus more on just one character and their trials. I'm glad i finally got the opportunity to read something like this, and definitely cannot wait for the next chapter!

best of luck!~
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47 Name: moonphase : 2011-04-25 05:55 ID:cjXIxz3K

And finally these are my favourite reviews from Tetch's Misadventures in Arkham-
mouseagent
2010-10-13 . chapter 15
Okay...so.

I just started reading this after watching (for the umpteenth time) BTAS's "Mad As A Hatter", "The Trial" and "Requiem For A Dream". I knew I had to find some sort of decent fanfiction, but I also knew Mad Hatter stuff was limited due to lack of fanbase. Not like the Joker.

So, yeah. I went on a quest, not expecting to find much of anything, but then...

Oh, this one looks interesting...

And I click on this story of yours.

And I start reading.

And I continue reading for 15 pages.

And now, I think I'll go on a psychotic rampage if I don't find out what happens next. You got me hooked, baby.

Not only is the writing excellent, and the description superb, the character descriptions and interpretations are. Amazing.

The characters are so very, very true to the original it's kinda scary.

Even the relationship between Crane and Tetch seems cannon.

And they are being slashed, right? Yeah?

Yeah. You have got to continue this. For the Tetch's sake.
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AZ-woodbomb
2010-02-04 . chapter 5
That’s a very wicked Scarecrow you’ve got there. I think I like it.

Jervis’ gradual detachment from reality is cool and very much in-character. Joker’s cameo is nice as well.

The atmosphere of the asylum comes across quite strongly. Hmm, you’ll have to excuse my not-so-deep review.

Anyway, this is interesting stuff.
sunshine7
2010-02-03 . chapter 5
ok, can I just say how much I love this story! Seriously, your characterization of both Crane and Tetch (and the Joker too) is perfect, you captured their voices so well! I can see all of this happening in my mind as I read along. I really hope you update soon, I am so excited to see what happens next, especially the interaction between Jervis and Jonathan (two of the most interesting/disturbed of b-man's villains in my opinion). I am also totally digging your scarecrow, he is suitably creepy/insane/smart. Poor Jervis, I really feel for the little guy. You really illustrate the horror of the asylum, totally not a place I would want to be (actually no I would secretly love to visit), but certainly wouldn't want to stay there overnight ;) Can wait to read more. Just wanted to tell you how fantastic of a writer you are, I'm impressed! Awesome work so far!

48 Name: moonphase : 2011-04-25 05:56 ID:cjXIxz3K

I mainly get criticised for spelling. But on the whole sometimes I think my reviewers can be too nice, lol. So getting the criticism stops my head from swelling up and helps me improve. Sorry for spamming up the thread, but I couldn't choose just one.

49 Name: MaryMagdalen : 2011-04-25 08:31 ID:rvRsVIuf

This was the first ever review for my first ever fic, from someone who's been writing damn good fanfic for a lot longer than I have:

"Well done on your first post. I thought this was incredibly well written. You're characterization is dead-on, and your OC's are well established. It's rare someone impresses me so much with a first story. Your spelling was very accurate, and I noticed only a couple of grammatical errors which, in a six-chapter story, is very good."

Needless to say, because of this I kept writing!
Jude

50 Name: Elkkun : 2011-04-25 11:06 ID:c/VkrJtT

It's a little off topic, but my name on FF.net is SoulKeeper.
My first reviewer was called, you guessed it, Soul. It cracked me up. XD

51 Name: Chris000 : 2011-05-01 12:38 ID:MHOlZ1zc

My favorite review came from UltimaTheGod, who wanted to review all 32 chapters of a story I wrote, and eventually we started corresponding be e-mail, and we trade ideas. The best review is one that starts a friendship.

52 Name: KaiHillover◆2BozL9qisE : 2011-05-21 16:29 ID:yXryW1an

The first review I ever got on my first story is which I'd consider being my fave. I love that review though, it was tiny. =D
It is what gave me inspiration to write more! ^_^

53 Name: KaiHillover◆2BozL9qisE : 2011-05-21 16:34 ID:yXryW1an

Another gr8 came to mind by reading a post on top of mine.My second fave has to be 1 given by someone who's story's I used to review a long time back; before I had started writing fanfics. She had quit ff but then, some time after I started writing, she started using fanfic again and she reviewed one my stories and we started PMing each other and now we're friends and I just found out we actually live in the same city as me XD! How stupid of us not actually asking where the other lives!
Chris000 is right the best review is the one that starts a friendship. ^_^

54 Name: thecrimson : 2011-07-09 17:39 ID:+ddBYs3/

This is my favorite:

A'ight, I can wait 7 chapters at least (even if you did forget my name -.-). Love how you're making the name of the chapter 'Harder to Breathe' though. Maroon 5 would be proud :P Still makes me wonder how you forget the name and remember the song -.-

Review Q: Well, I haven't changed my opinion of Willow, not unlike that of Mainiac, but Sir Kima is on my Rapist-Radar (trademarked) now though. I think that she better cool off on her infatuation with Solo or she's gonna get burned, big time. It could possibly become more serious, but that would require careful manipulation of your plot and a hell of alot of work on behalf of your characters. Otherwise I don't think it will grow beyond a small subplot.

I would comment on the comments but that isn't the place of the commentor to comment on the comments of the commentee for which that is of the commentor.. If you can follow that, you deserve more credit than given.

~Echo

AKA Dust Silver on RS

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